高分应用文突破系列:新闻报道

●新闻报道的特点:

“五个W”: who, when, where, what, why 一个H:how

（即:时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过、结果)

2.新闻报道写作框架:

Part 1:标题-简明准确地概括消息内容

Part 2:导语-最核心的内容(吸引读者) para.1(5Wh)

Part 3:主体-报道事实,繁简适度,层次分明,详略得当

Part 4:结语-小结式,启发式,号召式,展望式 para.3

●审题立意定框架

假定你是李华,上周你校组织了一场交通安全知识讲座. 请你给校英文报写一篇报道,内容包括: 1.参加人员 2.讲座过程 3.活动意义

审题立意:

体裁格式:新闻报道(讲座类) 时态:一般过去时 人称:第三人称

定框架: 新闻标题

Para.1 导语: 题干背景+参与人员(5W)

Para.2 主体: 讲座过程(1H)

Para.3 结语: 活动的意义

●发散思维, 列全要点

普遍的思路:

Para.1参加人员: 学生

Para.2 讲座过程: 很精彩! 交通安全知识; 强调交通安全重要性

Para.3 讲座意义:很有意义; 学到了很多交通知识

主要问题:角度单一 ;思维不开阔;流水账式

正确的思路:

多视角入手: 报道同一事物,应注意错开角度, 即寻找不同的侧重点.目的是使新闻主题既不与别报重复, 又报道了新闻事实.

角度: 主讲人&观众

主讲人角度：

①分享例子,解释交规 ②分享生活中的交通知识并运用到日常生活中

③与观众互动/测试环节 ④呼吁观众重视交通安全问题

观众角度:

①专心致志地听 ②重点内容做笔记

③积极参与现场互动 ④鼓掌致谢

●筛选有序,紧扣要点巧扩充

▲首段:导语,概括全文

上周五我校组织了一场交通安全知识讲座,全体师生都参与了听讲.

(when, where, who, what)

Last Friday, a significant lecture was successfully organized by our school in the school hall. All the teachers and students in our school attended it.

(语态: 被动要比主动好)

▲中间段:讲座过程, 详细清晰

①演讲者展示了与交通安全有关的相关例子.(数字,图片,视频记录等)--确定演讲人身份: police; speaker, lecturer

②演讲者解读实用的交通规则和交通知识.

③演讲者与观众的互动环节/测试环节.

④演讲者再次呼吁/强调遵守交通规则.

任选2~3点,理清逻辑形成段

1.演讲者展示了与交通安全有关的相关例子(数字,图片,视频录音等)---确定演讲人身份: police; speaker, lecturer

①The speaker first presented the shocking number of people who died in the

traffic accidents.

②The traffic police from our city showed us some pictures of typical traffic

accidents.

③First of all, a fabulous video about traffic safety was played.

④The lecturer presented the audience with recordings about how neglected the

students were when they headed to and from school.

2.演讲者解读实用的交通规则和交通知识.

① He shared some traffic rules with us.

②Then the lecturer equipped/ provide audience with practical traffic rules.

③Then came detailed instructions. (then提前的完全倒装)

3.演讲者与观众的互动环节/测试环节.

①It came to the questioning/ interaction part. All people on the spot could ask

questions freely.

②Also there was a quiz to test relevant knowledge.

4.演讲者再次呼吁/强调遵守交通规则.

①He appealed to the audience to obey the traffic rules and cherish our lives.

②It was strongly suggested that all people should strictly obey the traffic rules.

▲尾段:讲座意义

1.进一步了解相关安全知识

①It helped the audience have a better understanding of related traffic safety

knowledge.

②The audience acquire abundant knowledge about traffic safety from the lecture.

2.提高交通安全重要性意识

①The lecture undoubtedly impressed audience with the importance of traffic

safety.

②The lecture has successfully raised the listeners’ awareness of traffic safety.

3.有助于提高应对紧急交通问题的能力

①After the event, the audience knew how to handle emergent traffic problems

and ensure their safety.

②It improved the listeners’ ability to cope with the urgent traffic problems.

理清逻辑,任选1~2点, 句式合并

筛选有序,初步成文

理清逻辑,添加适当细节和衔接词,形成文篇

●筛选有序,初步成文

A Lecture on Traffic Safety

Last Friday, a significant lecture was successfully organized by our school in the school hall. . All the teachers and students in our school attended it.

During the lecture, the policeman first gave examples by showing some pictures. He then analyzed some key traffic rules and showed how to apply them to people’s daily life. Next, it came to the interaction part. Finally, he appealed to the audience to obey the traffic rules and cherish their lives. 中间段,流水账

理清逻辑,添加适当细节和衔接词,形成文篇

The lecture undoubtedly impressed the audience with the importance of traffic safety and improved their ability to cope with the urgent traffic problems.

●提升句子细润色

段1:

Last Friday, a significant lecture was successfully organized by our school in the school hall. . All the teachers and students in our school attended it.

→Last Friday witnessed all the teachers and students in our school attended a

significant lecture on the traffic safety delivered by a local policeman.

段2：

1.During the lecture, the policeman first gave examples by showing some pictures.

→

扩句法:增添适当的细节使得句意表达更为完整.

2.He then analyzed some key traffic rules and showed how to apply them to people’s daily life.

→

扩句法:增添目的状语

3.Next, it came to the interaction part.

→

扩句法:对前句进行进一步的解释说明,使之更为具体.

4.Finally, he appealed to the audience to obey the traffic rules and cherish their lives.

→

换用句型,使得过渡更为自然

段3：

The lecture undoubtedly impressed the audience with the importance of traffic safety and improved their ability to cope with the urgent traffic problems.

→

●全文欣赏

A Lecture on Traffic Safety

Last week witnessed all the teachers and students in our school attended a lecture on the traffic safety delivered by a local policeman.

During the lecture,

The lecture undoubtedly impressed the audience with the significance of traffic safety and bettered their ability to handle the urgent traffic problems.

How to polish language?

善用修辞(拟人)

巧用高级词/句型

定语从句/分词短语作定语/名词性从句

扩句法: 增添状语和解释句

●举一反三: 相关话题写作策略

1.假定你是李华是你校英文报的记者, 上周六你校学生会主办了一场英语经典作品朗诵比赛,请你以An English Recitation Competition为题写一篇英语报道, 内容包括:1.参赛选手 2.比赛过程 3.活动意义

注意：1. 词数80左右 2. 可适当增加细节使行文连贯

比较：本文为比赛类报道，与活动类报道相比，明确参赛人员，写清比赛过程（包括比赛环节与内容等），活动意义，文笔活泼热情尤佳。

写作角度:参赛人员&观众&裁判

An English Recitation Competition

Last Saturday, our school held an English classic recitation competition at

the lecture hall to encourage our students to appreciate English culture.

Representatives of each class took an active part in the competition. 导语: 5w

Participants were required to recite an English classic within five minutes. Many classic works were recited, among which poems were the most popular choice. After fierce competition, the first eight winners were chosen and given prizes. 过程:how

2.假定你是李华,你校上周举办了以 “庆祝建党100周年” (Celebrating the 100 Anniversary of the Founding of the CPC)为主题的作文大赛, 请你为你校英文报写一则报道。内容包括：1.活动目的 2.举办情况 3.活动反响

注意：1.字数80字左右 2.可适当增加细节使行文连贯

比较：本文为活动类报道, 与讲座类报道相比, 突出活动目的、活动情况（包括参与人员、活动安排、活动内容等），活动反响（与活动意义有所不同），文笔激情热烈尤佳 !

Celebrating the 100 Anniversary of the Founding of the CPC

On June 26, a writing competition was successfully held in our school with the theme of celebrating the 100 anniversary of the founding of the CPC. 导语: 5w

The competition was aimed at reminding students to remember the tough times that the CPC went through and honor the great dedication of our pioneers. It was met with such a great enthusiasm that more than 300 original works were received. After careful selection by the judge, the top 20 were posted on the school WeChat Official Accounts. 活动目的+举办情况

3.假定你是校英语报李华,上周你校开展了读“一本英语原著活动”, 请你写一篇报道,内容如下：1.活动目的 2.活动内容 3.活动成效

注意：1.词数80左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯

比较:本文为无标题类活动报道,与有标题类报道相比, 难度稍大,需要综合概括;但也可以 “一次难忘的活动+主题” 构成标题(基本通用)

An Unforgettable Activity -Reading an Original English Work

Aimed at getting our students interested in English and motivating them to learn English more efficiently, an activity named “Reading an original English work” was held in our school last week. 导语:5w

It was required that every student should read a native work of English and write a book review in this week. This Friday afternoon witnessed students shared their book reviews either by giving speeches or making presentations in the school hall.Afterwards came heated discussions, making students present deeply impressed.

内容:how

●范文二次开发

A Lecture on Traffic Safety

Last Friday, our school 1._______(success) organized a significant lecture in the school hall, which won the fierce praise of both teachers and students. All the students and the teachers participated in the lecture delivered by a 2._______( distinguish) traffic policeman.

During the lecture, the speaker first presented the shocking number of people 3.____died in the traffic accidents due to their 4._______(disobey) traffic regulations. Then it was about specific traffic rules, which are bound 5._______(follow) when going out. 6._______(last), 7.____ impressed the listeners most was his appeal 8.______ everyone should obey the traffic rules and cherish lives.

Not only 9._______(do) the audience acquire abundant knowledge about traffic 10._______(safe) from the lecture, but they also were aware of the importance of obeying traffic rules.

参考答案:

●素材&语料积累(课后积累和消化)

开头段：

1.In order to raise students' awareness of earthquake emergency evacuation, all the students, with the guide of the teachers, engaged in an evacuation drill organized by our school in the school playground.

为了提高同学们的地震应急疏散意识，全体同学在老师的带领下，在学校操场上组织了一次疏散演习。

2.Aiming to build up health, students from HongXing Middle School participated in a mountain-climbing activity organized by the Students' Union last Monday morning.

为了增强体质，上周一上午，红星中学的学生参加了由学生会组织的登山活动。

3.Organized by our school, all the students paid a visit to Xiwang Agricultural Ecology Garden on the morning of April 29th, aiming to savor the experience of nature and broaden their horizons.

4月29日上午，我校组织全体同学参观了希望农业生态园，体验自然，开阔视野。

中间段：

1.As scheduled, the activity started at 8 am on Saturday morning and it lasted for three hours.

活动如期于周六上午8点举行，持续3个小时。

2.As scheduled, we assembled outside the school gate at 8:00 a.m. and headed for the destination in high spirits.

按照计划，我们早上8点在学校大门外集合，兴高采烈地前往目的地。

3.All the way we were chatting, singing and laughing, enjoying the fresh air and the beautiful scenery.

一路上，我们聊天、唱歌、大笑，享受着新鲜的空气和美丽的风景。

4.It was not until half past six in the evening that the activity came to an end.

直到晚上6点半，活动才结束。

admire the breathtaking beauty of various plants, followed by a quiz about

distinguishing the name of the plants. After that, they embarked on operating the planting machine by themselves.

到达目的地后，在厂主的带领下，学生们被带着欣赏各种植物令人惊叹的美丽，然后进行分辨这些植物名称的小测验。从那以后，他们开始自己操作种植机器。

结尾段：

1.From this activity, we learned how to cooperate with each other and came to realize the importance of teamwork.

通过这次活动，我们学会了如何相互合作，并逐渐意识到团队合作的重要性。

2.The exhibition turned out to be a great hit. Not only has it brought joy to us but also broadened our horizons. Every participant expects another one.

展览取得了巨大的成功。它不仅给我们带来了欢乐，也开阔了我们的视野。每个参与者都期望有另一个。

3.This activity proved to be a success, strengthening our willpower and making us more confident about our future study.

这次活动很成功，增强了我们的意志力，让我们对未来的学习更有信心。

4.Through this activity, students gained a better understanding of modern

agriculture, broadening their horizons, and raised their awareness of green life as well.

通过这次活动，同学们对现代农业有了更深入的了解，开阔了眼界，也提高了对绿色生活的认识。

5.Undoubtedly / Unquestionably, this activity proved meaningful and beneficial for students to get involved in.

毫无疑问，对学生来说这次活动是非常有意义的。

6.By uniting their purposes and efforts to tackle concrete project, students

become increasingly aware of the significance of cooperation and teamwork.

通过联合他们的目的和努力来解决具体的项目，学生们越来越意识到合作和团队合作的重要性。

总的来说，写好活动类型的新闻报道，注意好开头段的引入要全面，结尾段的升华也要注意一下结构的使用，而中间段最好不用大段的套话空话，写实在点的，过渡词用副词或者介词等小词就足够。比如after that, then, followed by....

再者，注意不要出语法错误，想要用插入语和-ing做状语时，也要确保一个主句里只能有一个谓语动词，然后就是注意好时态。一般报道都是一般过去式。

●实战演练:

1.假定你是李华,上周六你校举办了“走进秀美乡村一日游”研学活动。请你为校英

文报写一篇报道。

内容包括：1.参加人员；2.研学的内容：感受乡村环境变化，体验农村生活；3.活动感受。

注意：1.词数 100 左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.题目已给出，不计入总词数。

2.假定你是某国际学校英文报学生记者李华，你校学生会举行了交换生毕业晚会。请你用英文写一篇新闻报道。

要点如下：1.活动的目的；2.活动的时间、地点、方式；3.活动的感受。

注意：1.写作词数应为80左右； 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

3.假定你是校英文报小记者，上周日，你校学生会带领交换生参观了陕西历史博物馆。请你以A Visit to the History Museum为题写一篇新闻报道。

要点如下: 1.参加人员； 2.活动经过； 3.活动意义。

注意：1.词数100左右； 2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

4.假定你是李华，为了丰富学生的课余生活和锻炼学生的意志力，上周末，你校组织了一次四十五公里的远足活动。请你在校英语报上写一篇报道。

内容包括：1.活动的目的；2.活动的情况；3.活动的反响。

注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。