writing经验

饼状图的写作思路是既要比较一个饼图内部不同部分的大小比例，也要分析不同饼图之间同一成分的大小顺序。一般说来，可以根据图例来安排写作顺序。

（小作文时间最佳控制在20min）

以剑11 Task1为实例。

文章结构：

第一段——改写题目

第二段——(2)概述

第三段——(3)细节一

第四段——(4)细节二

第五段——(5)总结

The given six pie charts totally illustrate the using proportion of water for three different aspects in six regions worldwide.

（其实第一段就是标题同义替换，也就是介绍背景）

Generally in the relatively developed continents including North America and the Europe, the pattern of water-usage distribution shares great similarity, whereas other four underdeveloped regions indicates another type of smaller gaps.

（展示细节，其实我觉得这是在考察一种能力，对于饼状图不同内容分类找不同中的相似群体，这是一个能力，能够把地区用水量，分为发达地区和不发达地区，之后来探讨问题）（整体宏观地说）（这里虽然是宏观地讲，但是其实是很不具体的，只说了发达地区的情况相似，但是没有具体说哪些地方相似，之后说，落后地区的跟发达的有差距）

To be more specific, the water utilization of industry is both dominant in the two flourishing territory,approximately half of the whole (48% versus 53%), followed by that of agriculture, which take up marginally more than one-third of the total. In correspondence, the using percentage of water resource for residents is the least, with only 13% and 15% respectively, which still largely exceed the figures for the other four regions.

（开始讲北美和欧洲的细节了，具体展开了两个表格，详细说）

（这里总共是两句话，但是中间都插了从句，那大概就是四句话的容量，第二段，自己写的时候才发现并不容易，

一个是之前没有怎么练习小作文，对于表格题中的占有，达到多少，这种感觉不是很会表达，张口就是“use”很是没有心意，还是觉得不行

这里虽然分为了两类，但是介绍数据的时候，还是要分开讲数据，这个要怎么表达，包括掌握分别副词，很重要，比如separately和respectively，他这里就表达比较自然，而且水平比较高）

Apparently, the developing areas invest far more water in agriculture, each having around 80%, and even the least, the figure for South America still constitute 71% while the largest number even reach nearly 90%. Thereby , it is obvious that the use of other two respects is bound to be less: no more than 10% domestic use in Central Asia and Southeast Asia. These areas even use less water in industry (merely 5%~7%, with the highest percentage12%). By contrast, people in South America utilize a higher proportion of water in domestic aspect, almost 20%, half of which is used in industrial part of the region.

（之后是，介绍其他的四个图，它的连接词使用是很好的）

Overall, the water resource of developed areas is distributed more in economic products involving industry and agriculture, while developing ones only consume a considerable number of water in agriculture.

（最后，再总结给出一个结论）

这篇是剑11给的低分样板，4.5分。

The charts indicate to Five places on the earth.Talking about waker and the waysof using it.

It seen obvious all of pie charts have che got the Lowesk precenkage in the domeskic uses like at home.Housever,the Largest precentage wenk with the Agriculkural and farms.The cenker of Asia has the greakest numbers of precenkage of Agriculkural use.On the other hand in Europe they did nok use,waker so much as central Asia or Africa.They jusk use 32,4%.But in Che industral chey use it alot and the Largesk precentage with them.If we check on Africa,ik seen they almosk the second after Asia use water in industrial and opposike of Europe.

In North America and Europe Chey slightly same in industrial use and just less 4 precentages to Europe,South Asia and South America are uses the waker in Agricultural rakher than industrial..

Overall,they all use wer much in the farm and Agucukural.Europeand North Amerca they use aber more than others in the indskrial areas.Africa gok heoprecentage in domestic and industrial uses.

个人版 (只写了两端，后面再补一下)

The given six pie charts totally illustrate the using proportion of water for three different aspects in six regions worldwide.

We can samply make a standard to distinguish , the developed continent , the North America and the Europe ，and the developing continent ， S, A, C, S。The developed place invests a nearly half percentage in industrial use， but in developing place, it is almost the lowest piece. The usage of agriculture accupies a lot of share , and the water of the resident use is so low.