【Body 2】

As a matter of fact, the aforementioned harvest is reaped at the sacrifice of the student’s physical and mental soundness, and, more importantly, the parental clichés of hard work cannot be applied to many walks of life, especially those requiring much talent and epiphany. A compelling illustration is that kids who innately have a malfunctioning auditory or vocal organ are least likely to be a singer like Luciano Pavarotti, a world-renowned Italian tenor, no matter how hard they try to imitate and practice. Likewise, a child suffering from polio is predestined not to run as Usain Bolt does. At this point, the encouragement and stimulus from parents, in essence, are a high tale that will render children pressurized and even frustrated.

Ø 本段的头两个句子的syntactic structure都十分高能，做好解构和模仿工作吧？定、状从用得好，你就能领略到写作世界的蔚然大观；

Ø Likewise的后一句在引用修辞做类比（analogy），这种论证方式你不学一下么？

Ø Lexis: 如果你的作文要7+，那么less common vocabulary 以及 idiomatic expressions必不可少，如：reap, soundness, epiphany, render, pressurized, high tale等等；

Ø TR也解释一下吧，本文看似没有在罗列disadvantages的一二分别是什么（因为这样太八股了！），可文章无时无刻不在回应“只要努力就能实现任何事”的荒诞性(high tale一词的出现就是天方夜谭)。因此，笔者旨在无限的放大和弱化原argument，可不就是等于写了disadvantages了么？get到了吧？

Ø 推荐本书给大家读读吧，E. A. Poe的《恐怖怪诞故事集》，里面都是high tales；

Ø 记住，“达意” （or “表意功能”）永远是雅思写作语言关的要义，追求极简与自然。