Generally speaking, I feel you've often used complex structures and long sentences for the sake of it and as a consequence. . . although your paragraphing and inclusion of subheadings help. . . it's quite hard to follow your train of thought at times.

总的来说，我觉得你常用复杂的长句子，尽管你的分段和副标题可以起到帮助的作用，但是有时还是很难了解你的发展思路。