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雅思大作文 | 动物园应该被摒弃？

作者/新航道南京学校朱玲娇

你是否也曾关注过这样的热搜：#小学生建议英语课本撤掉动物表演#; #大熊猫频繁“越狱”是否是渴望大自然的生活#

动物表演和其他用于敛财的方式（比如泰国骑大象啦，每每想起那种钩子扎进大象头部，就觉得残忍至极）毫无疑问应该被严厉批评。那动物园是否应该一起被禁止呢？好像印象中动物园的动物都挤在一起，极不舒服；但是一看其他一些动物园的一些现状，比如熊猫基地，是不是又觉得动物园没有想象的那么糟？

接下来我们就来看看名词化的实例：

Some people think zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

【审题】双边讨论的议论文。千万注意，本题并不是单纯讨论动物园的利弊问题，双方的切入点分别在“cruel”和“useful to protect the rare animals”，因此两方的论述点都要点出这两部分关键词哦~

Introduction

It has not been a rare case nowadays that some species arevanishing. This can be in partascribed tothe shortage of natural conservation areas or zoos.Personally, zoos are a sound place for preserving those endangered animals, despite someminutelosses.

Ø vanish vi. 绝迹，消失

Ø be ascribed to 被归因于

Ø minute adj. 细小的 → 熟词生用，注意发音

让步反驳部分

【论述思路】先让一小步，承认反方观点的合理性，注意语气要委婉，给后续反驳留有余地：动物被局限在狭窄的人工圈养地，某种程度上剥夺了他们的自由，长此以往可能对生存技能发展有负面影响；有些不良动物园甚至提供动物表演（注意：反方观点的立场一定要立足“cruel”）// 驳斥这些坏处可以被最小化，只要动物园正规且被严格管控。

Admittedly, it is justifiable for some toadvocatetheprohibitionof zoos. This is mainly because once animals are incages,they are to some extentdeprived oftheir basic rights, such as wandering in their natural habitats.More accurately, kept in an artificial environment usually with limited space and fed by zoo workers, thesecagedanimals are graduallyaccustomed tothe so-called comfort zones, which may ultimately render them obstructed in nurturing their capabilities of hunting or avoiding otherpredators.Besides, some zoos even train zoo animals to deliver performances for the sake of rake in profits. // However, the aforementioned detriments can in effect be minimised as long as zoos are strictly confined and well regulated by some issued laws.

Ø advocate vt. 支持

Ø prohibition n. 禁止（注意下文的词性变体，增加CC）

Ø deprive sb. of sth. 剥夺某人某物

Ø cage n. 牢笼；vt. 把…关起来（注意词性变体）

Ø be accustomed to 习惯于（注意to是介词）

Ø predator n. 捕食者（阅读中学的词汇拿来用！）

立论部分

【论述思路】好处一定要从“useful to protect rare animals”出发，比如利于动物学家观察研究，利于公众学习了解稀有动物的悲惨现状，从而培养公众保护野生动物意识（这句话必不可少，不然没有明确点题）。什么“提供就业”啊这种好处就别提了，跑偏了。

As a matter of fact, behind the establishment of well-regulated zoos are more profound meanings. The most conspicuous one is that some species, such as pandas, which might struggle for basicsurvivalsif left in natural habitats can actuallysurvivein zoos.More specifically, it is viaenclosingendangered animals in a manmade living environment similar to their habitats and keeping them under observation that zoologists can focus on animals’ health conditions, further study their behaviour, and update thecutting-edge research findings.In this sense, the updated findings, be they offline or online , can enable the general public, including visitors in zoos and web surfers , tohave a glimpse intonot only the detailed information about those zoo animals but also the severe situations they are confronted with, which is an effective approach tosummonhumans to protect thoseplanet-mates.

Ø enclose vt. 围起来；n. enclosure 围场

Ø cutting-edge adj. 前沿的

Ø research findings 研究成果

Ø have a glimpse into 领略

Ø summon vt. 号召

Ø planet-mate n. mate一般指共享某物的成员，注意这种复合构词法

Conclusion

In a nutshell, those zoos aiming at profits solely should beprohibited, while those regulated ones should be motivated.

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